New Character Submission - Saith Drekan

[Destraya]

Character: Saith Drekan
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Class: Rogue
Race: Human
Alignment: True Neutral



Biography:

Saith grew up in Caesin one of the islands in the Dragon Isles north of Alindor. His father was a simple farmer of wheat and his mother was unnocupied. Saith had left the town at the age of 18 when he became a man to make a living in a new area as it was his fathers wish. Saith is an only child and set out only with the clothes on his back and 300 gold which his family had been saving up. His father had died two days before his departure and his last words were to never be too vunerable and to judge the situation based on whats going on; do what you think is the best and other people words aren;t always the best.. Now Saith seeks a new life by the sword traveling from town to town and exploring the lands. He was trained by his uncle who is an ex town guard, with wooden swords. Saith had always used a shortsword as a main weapon and a dagger as an offhand. He is literate though barely due to the fact he taugh himself to read. He lives off what he finds as he never honed a true skill or job and is a jack of all trades doing odd jobs for odd people. From his childhood he exceled at dissapearing. All the children could never find him at hide and seeks and he finds pleasure in people knowing hes not there. He finds some confrontations are best avoided and sneak attacks are his most powerful ability. He is agile and prefers dexterity over brute strength, often tumbing and rolling around in battle and parrying attacks rather than powering through. As a child he helped his parents around the farm and had always dreamed of lands other than where he lived, mainly fueld by his fathers longing to travel, but inability due to their financial situation. If they left the farm, they'd be poor; the farm supported them just enough for them to live a content life.

Description: Five foot seven with a somewhat thin yet experienced build from traveling.His hair is a dark brown with piercing blue eyes. His hair is long and often wear darks attire.

Manner: Saith is often polite on the outside, but cunning and scheming on the inside. He sizes up people as he talks to them and is often distant if he see danger in them. He is somewhat reclusive and doesn't always talk openly to others or start conversations.

[darkstorme]

Hi there!

Sorry again, but the Evil alignments are far more restrictive than Chaotic Neutral. To submit an Evil character (and Chaotic Evil is never permitted for PCs), you need to have been involved in the community for nine months and have a character of level fourteen or higher.

You can check the Alignment Rules for more information.

Thanks!

[Destraya]

Alright I edited the post, I hope that the sheet is more suitable.

[darkstorme]

True neutral is perfectly acceptable.

That being said, there are a few things that I'd like to see addressed:

• First, an alignment change has to be reflected by the biography as well. If the character described could just as easily be Evil as Neutral, he needs to be expanded to illustrate why he is a particular alignment.
• Second, what makes him a Rogue, and not a Bard, or an itinerant Fighter?
• Finally, which distant land? There's lots of space to choose from - the Maps of Layonara can give you all the information you'll need.

That being said, it's a good start!

Thanks.

[Destraya]

I have fleshed out his backround a bit more and connected his class to his childhood.

[darkstorme]

Good progress - I can see the support for the class and alignment.

However, I don't know of any place named "a Diego" in Layonara - please choose a location extant in the world, even if it's "off the coast of [continent], to the north of [city]."

Also, you've introduced his uncle as the man who trained him in arms - what qualifications did his uncle have to train him? Was he ex-militia? A duelist in his own right?

Essentially, what the character submission should leave you with is the ability, should he be asked, to tell another character about his history. (That being said, he doesn't HAVE to tell them, but he should be able to. )

When the above points are addressed and you've fleshed out his background a bit further, you should be ready to go.

[Destraya]

I have fleshed out the bio more and added details. I mean to actually develope the characters story more as I travel the lands rather than his old life as a farm boy. I hope that he can have some sort of claim to fame no matter how small whether it be finding a job or owning a small business.

[darkstorme]

*smiles* Developing his story is what adventuring is all about. That being said, you have to know where a character came from to know where he's going. (Though Heisenberg would tell us that you can't know where he's going and where he is at the same time... sorry. )

Anyway, after some consultation (sorry on the miss on the Deigo thing - I have to bone up on my islands!), Deigo is not the kind of island one would raise crops on. Or live on. Or, if one could avoid it, set foot on. It's basically untamed jungle, the "Serpents" who give the isle their name abound, and those creatures who do not slither are, without exception, hostile. Boats travel near the islands on an annual basis, at best, and there are no settlements anywhere in the Serpent Isles. If you're determined to have his family live in that region, the best bet would be Ceasin in the Dragon Isles. Even so, they'd have to stay close to the shore... and out of the forests.

Once you've found a more hospitable place for his family to live, post here again and I'll be there to review.

[Destraya]

Alright I've changed it with the suggestion, I like the name of the Island and the island chain its in and i wanted to keep the island near Alindor so it' s perfect.

[darkstorme]

Alright.

Approved

Server address: west.layonara.com
Server password: layoplayer

As some final advice: stick to your alignment, and find some friends in-game - Layo does not treat lonely heroes kindly.

Have fun!

Edit: Addendum - do you wish your other submission (the Tiefling) to be deleted?

[Destraya]

Yes if the tiefling were delelted that'd be nice.