New Character Submission - Aedimir Dawnstar

Phros · 09-04-07, 07:49 PM

Aedimir Dawnstar

Age: 117

Class: Wizard

Race: Elf

Subrace: Sun Elf

Alignment: Neutral Good

Deity: Aeridin

Languages: Elven, Common.

Bio: Born in Sadinia to a privileged family of Arcanists, Aedimir displayed an aptitude for finer arts at an early age, though his true passion was magic. He would spend days in the family library, falling asleep in piles of books. Time passsed, and Aedimir progressed in his studies, though as he aged, he became more and more restless. His desire to experience things through books gradually became a desire to experience things first-hand.

His family would have none of this. Such thoughts only add to the chaos the world was in. There was no reason to leave home, they believed, he had a society to contribute to. Besides, what would the other members of the house think of them, their only son, the product of their parentage, having left to dabble in the business of lesser races?

Many years passed, and the arguements intensified. Aedimir began to become increasingly impatient and frustrated. After countless debates and fights, he finally decided to leave without consent, taking passage out of the city with nothing but a robe and a half-empty spell tome..

Aedimir was soon reduced to a poor, ragged wanderer. Desperately seeking a place to sleep one night, he stumbled upon a temple of Aeridin, whose clerics took him in, fed him, and gave him a place to sleep. Impressed by their kindness, Aedimir took it upon himself to swear allegiance to The Lifegiver, and adopt the same doctrine of kindness and charity.

Leaving with a renewed sense of purpose and direction, Aedimir set off to try to further expand his knowledge of the Arcane, and bring what comfort he could to the denizens of the troubled world.

darkstorme · 09-05-07, 03:08 AM

Hi there!

A great start, just a few things.

First of all, Saida is now Sadinia (as per the updated Map of Voltrex).

Second, while Sun Elves can certainly be studious, studiousness does not make a Sun Elf. What about this character makes him a member of this particular subrace? As it stands, the race could change to Moon Elf (standard elf) with no changes.

Finally, why Aeridin? The God of Healing, director of the Great Cycle - there's nothing in Aedimir's background that indicates an interest in the Lifegiver's art. Expand on these three points, and possibly elaborate on Aedimir's personality a bit, and you should be ready to go.

Thanks!

As a postscript, while you seem to have severed ties with his family, if they are privileged, it has to be clear that they cannot impart any such privilege to him - he starts, as do most adventures, with little more than the clothes on his back and a few coins.

Phros · 09-05-07, 03:21 PM

Post revised, good sir.

jrizz · 09-07-07, 03:18 PM

Thank you for the extra work. Have fun.
Your character has been approved.

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