New Character Submission - Torbin Ironsmith

[Brian Burton]

Character: Torbin Ironsmith
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Class: Fighter
Race: Human
Alignment: Chaotic Good



Biography:

THe dark times were hard on Torbin's family. Torbin's father had to take a job with the town watch to make ends meet and Torbin wasn't allowed out of the house. After the dark times Torbin spent most of his life on the road. His father was a traveling smith doing contract work for armories all over the continent. His mother became a seamstress and would mend clothing for whom ever her husband was contracted to at the time. They made a good living and Torbins father taught him how to forge weapons and armor. He would also spar with Torbin, handing down what he learned as a watchman. Torbin took to his lessons well and really enjoys manual labor. When Torbin's father would take a job they would stay at the local inn. This is where he learned most of his life lessons and his social skills. Every day new people would be coming and going: soldiers, prostitutes, merchants, magicians, nobles, ect. He wanted to here everyones stories, the ones he liked best were from adventurers and mercinaries. Tales of valor and contests of brute str. He is always quick to make friends and quicker to defend one. He loves to drink and to brawl. It's not uncommon to see him fist fighting some one and then five minutes later see them at the bar drinking and laughing together comparing black eyes.
When Torbin's parents decided to settle down and retire Torbin quickly became bored and decided to travel. Taking what little he owns he has headed out into the world. looking for new friends and new adventures.

Torbin is 6ft 4in
He has blonde hair and brown eyes
He has a large build due to years of smithing
He is loud and boisterous, he has little respect for athority but, he will obey the law as long as he agrees with it.
He loves a good fight (not that he enjoys hurting people/things, he just likes the adrenilin rush and the competition.)
He will never pick a fight with some one weaker than himself.
He will defend some one who he feels can't defend themselves or is at a disadvantage.
His main motivation for adventuring is to combat boredom.

[darkstorme]

Hi there!

This is good work, and we don't need to see too much more before approval. Just a few niggling details I'd like to see resolved, and we should have you in-game in no time.

First, I'd like to see something, just a little bit, pertaining to his training with arms and armour. He learned to forge them (thus great physical strength) and he clearly enjoys a good bar fight, but it takes some practice to actually wield a sword/wear armour.

Second, from 1402 to 1420, the world was shrouded in soot and dust from the wholesale destruction of a mountain range. During this period, Layonara suffered a minor ice age, complete with crops dying, famine, population decreases, and major economic recession. It's currently 1430, so Torbin would have been 9 when the sun returned to the world. Before that point, though, traveling craftsmen of whatever ilk would've found it hard to eke out a living. Prosperity more or less returned when the sun did, but I would like to see that hardship reflected, even if only in passing.

Once those two points are addressed, Torbin ought to be good to go. If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask.

Thanks!

[Brian Burton]

THe dark times were hard on Torbin's family. Torbin's father had to take a job with the town watch to make ends meet and Torbin wasn't allowed out of the house. After the dark times Torbin spent most of his life on the road. His father was a traveling smith doing contract work for armories all over the continent. His mother became a seamstress and would mend clothing for whom ever her husband was contracted to at the time. They made a good living and Torbins father taught him how to forge weapons and armor. He would also spar with Torbin, handing down what he learned as a watchman. Torbin took to his lessons well and really enjoys manual labor. When Torbin's father would take a job they would stay at the local inn. This is where he learned most of his life lessons and his social skills. Every day new people would be coming and going: soldiers, prostitutes, merchants, magicians, nobles, ect. He wanted to here everyones stories, the ones he liked best were from adventurers and mercinaries. Tales of valor and contests of brute str. He is always quick to make friends and quicker to defend one. He loves to drink and to brawl. It's not uncommon to see him fist fighting some one and then five minutes later see them at the bar drinking and laughing together comparing black eyes.
When Torbin's parents decided to settle down and retire Torbin quickly became bored and decided to travel. Taking what little he owns he has headed out into the world. looking for new friends and new adventures.

Torbin is 6ft 4in
He has blonde hair and brown eyes
He has a large build due to years of smithing
He is loud and boisterous, he has little respect for athority but, he will obey the law as long as he agrees with it.
He loves a good fight (not that he enjoys hurting people/things, he just likes the adrenilin rush and the competition.)
He will never pick a fight with some one weaker than himself.
He will defend some one who he feels can't defend themselves or is at a disadvantage.
His main motivation for adventuring is to combat boredom.

[darkstorme]

Looks good.

If I might make one suggestion (not for the bio, but for character background when you're RPing in-game), it would be to determine where the Ironsmith family traveled. Alindor and Mistone would be the two favourites (being the least dangerous on which to travel), the latter being the continent on which all PCs start.

That being said, another swordarm takes up the adventuring life in Layonara...
Your character has been approved.

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