New Character Submission - Kall Lannard

[Beez]

Character: Kall Lannard
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Classes: Barbarian
Race: Human
Alignment: Chaotic Good



Biography:

Kall began life in a Human barbarian tribe on the Bear Island in Alindor. He has dark brown skin and black hair in dreadlocks. He is fairly outgoing, not always talking, but not shy, either. He also loves a good laugh. At 21 years old, he has grown to 5'11" and 240 lbs. He has a loving for killing, but he never kills good folk. He first entered the rage when his mother was killed by a bear. He killed the bear. His fighting skills have helped keep his tribe alive. He hunted bears and other animals and kept his tribe fed. He left his barbarian tribe in search of monsters to kill, and because his tribe raided every town they came across, whether or not it contained good folk. Kall searches for adventure every chance he gets, and he never says no to a good fight. Kall's favored weapon is the Greataxe.

[darkstorme]

Hi there Beez. - good to see you got your NWN problems sorted out!

This is a good start to a submission, and we aim to get you in-game as soon as possible - but there are a few things we need to see before Kall can be approved.

First - prestige classes (like Bear Warrior) aren't granted at submission. They can be achieved through a later application, with either a well-maintained CDT or a CDQ - or, for some of the more complicated prestige classes, both! So Bear Warrior will have to be removed from your submission.

Now, as for your character bio - we look for a bit more detail from submissions. Now, Kall isn't anything too special - a human barbarian - so we don't need too much detail - but a bit more than you've got there already. You can have a look at some Recent Approvals or some older Character Approvals to get a sense of what we look for. Also, a few questions that might help you to better flesh out Kall:

• Where was he born? (See the Maps of Layonara)
• How did the Dark Ages affect his childhood?
• Is he shy, or outgoing?
• Jovial, or humourless?
• When did he first feel battle-rage (since this is more or less the barbarian's defining characteristic?
• What is his weapon of choice?

As for the Orc language - two points there. From the Orc entry in LORE (emphasis mine):

Orcs are constantly warring with or preparing to war with humanoids, including other Orc tribes. They sometimes ally with other humanoids for a time but turn on their former allies whenever the opportunity arises. Orcs are taught that all other beings are inferior and that all worldly goods rightfully belong to the Orcs, having been stolen by the others.

As such, a peaceful mixed tribe of humans and orcs is... beyond unlikely. If you're determined that Kall know the Orc language, the reason behind it will both have to be more plausible and better-developed, I'm afraid.

Once you've made updates to your submission, post again to this thread and it will be reviewed again.

Thanks!

[Beez]

edited

how is it now?

[jrizz]

This is very good there are just a few issues before we can approve it. Here is my advise in order to get this going. Leave out the part about the dark ages, just say he helped to feed his clan with his hunting skills. This way you dont have to get into a age to date calculation. But I encourage you to look up the dark ages in Lore and learn all you can. Next if you really want him to speak Orc you will have to expand greatly on how, where, why, and from who he was able to learn it. This expansion for Orc should be in the magnitude of three to four paragraphs.

[Beez]

there we go
i input how he learned orc and took out the Dark Ages part.

[jrizz]

Give us a day or so.

[Beez]

ok
i can do that

[jrizz]

We still feel that this is not enough to approve the Orc ear. Sorry to make this so hard on you but it is a big thing to approve a ear outside of those given to a PCs class on submission. Some players have had to study in game under a teacher for many months real time to get an ear. If you wish to ontinue to pursue the Orc ear then please add more to his teaching. You will also need to cover deeply how the elder learned Orcish.

[Beez]

ok, i just deleted the Orc language from the biography

[jrizz]

Your character has been approved.

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• Please note that racial adjustments for players with subraces are skin based and thus get applied after getting in game.
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