freddy fenderbold

[jan]

name.freddy fenderbold
age:32
race:human
class:fighter 20/ weaponmaster 20
allignment:neutral/good
deity/none

bio
born as the second son of a farmer. i noticed at young age that you need to protect yourself from the evil in the world. my fathers cow`s were stolen and i had to retrieve them from the bandit`s that stole them. my brother laught at my and sayd"you don`t know how to fight at all,if i want i kick your every time i want".i was intimidated by him,but i decided that i would be good enough to kick his sorry butt.i found a retired figter in the village who was kind enuogh to teach me in the fine art of sword-fighting.when i was good enough ,i challenced my brother for a duel,after a difficult fight i dicided that i could not stay on the farm because my poor older brother still could not accept his defeat. i went to the nearest town to become a well taught sword-figther.after many years of training ,my sponser decided that i had to prove myself.i had to retrieve an item thet was stolen from him by a former"friend".no i am on the search for him and i hope to bring it back to my sponser for all the help she gave me.

[IceDragonDuvessa]

First off Freddy Fender is a hispanic musician. This name is too close to the copywritten name.

Secondly We do not allow PrC's at submission anymore

Finally I really couldn't make a lot of sense of your bio. It seems jumbled and very hard to read.

Please rewrite and try your best with punctuation and spelling and your approval will be reconsidered.

Also keep in mind that this is a family server and we frown upon the use of such phrases as "I kick your "

[jan]

name.barion firesteed
age:32
race:human
class:fighter 20/ weaponmaster 20
allignment:neutral/good
deity/none

bio
born as the second son of a farmer. I noticed at a young age that you need to protect yourself from the evil in the world. My fathers cow`s were stolen and my brother and me had to retrieve them from the bandit`s that stole them. My brother laught at me and sayd "you don`t know how to fight at all,if i want i'll kick your butt every time i want to".I was intimidated by him, but i decided that i would be good enough to kick his sorry butt.I found a retired fighter in the village, who was kind enough to teach me the fine art of sword-fighting. When i was good enough ,i challenced my brother to a duel. After a difficult fight i decided i could not stay on the farm because my poor older brother still could not accept his defeat. I went to the nearest town to become a well taught sword-figther. I was lucky enough to find a female, who was willing to pay for my education. After many years of training ,my sponser decided i had to prove myself. I had to retrieve a valuable painting that was stolen from her by a former "friend". Now i am looking for him and the painting. I hope to bring it back to my sponser for all the help she gave me.

I was on my way to retreave the painting , when i had a dream of a dragon calling me.
I went to layonara to help,and ended up in hlint.
I had a lot of adventures around hlint and made a lot of new friends.
None of my friends see me as some-one special ,but they always want me to come along and help them if i'm around.
//I wrote this on a piece of paper ,before barion and shelu had a private talk in witch they tell each-other how they feel.
I have trained a lot,and i will show all that i am becoming the best sword fighter in the world ( or so i like to become )


//more on barions training and actions and motivations can be found on the following link:http://www.layonaraonline.com/forums...=18003&posts=3

[IceDragonDuvessa]

Approved as Fighter. Keep a development thread and resubmit an updated bio for this character later when you near the time to take weapon master levels.

[jan]

thanks, see you later