Hey there HandsOfGrace,
This is a good start, but we need to see a little more before this can be approved.
First of all, although
Aornir might not know anything about himself, we will need an OOC statement to the effect that Aonair does not have any sort of noble or privileged background, or connections that would give him an advantage over other characters (no "remembering" that he's the adopted son of a dragon-king
) Maybe you could tell us the content of the "flashes of memory"?
Second, this biography comes across as very CN - he lies, cheats, and steals, and there doesn't seem to be anything that pulls him him back towards neutral. When you revise this, you might think about using this to give us a stronger sense of Aonair's personality as well (we know how he acts, but little about what he's like as a person). Perhaps you can tell us how he made the friends (and enemies) you allude to?
As far as the class, we don't need very much, but just a little bit to tell us how he learned the tools of the trade - particularly because such a diverse group of people may have the rogue class, and because of the wide range of skills the rogue class has access to.
Finally, the biography doesn't say how he encountered Branderback, and why and how he worships him. Given that putting a deity in the field implies a high degree of devotion and adherence to the dogma, you need to provide some info regarding Aonair's worship of Branderback in order to be approved with the deity in the field.
Once you've made the changes, or if you have any questions, post again here.
~ycleption
