thank you for your first submission. It's a good read and there is not much I can complain about. Most of what I have to address is purely formal.
As you are submitting a multiclassed character, I need to know the intended level split at lvl 20, i.e. Classes: Cleric/Wizard/Rogue (x/y/z). Keep in mind you need at least 5 levels in each class before hitting level 21.
As you are also submitting for levels as a cleric, I need you to update the stat block with the two domains of Aragen you will choose for Jericho. The domains for Aragen can be found here: https://wiki.layonara.com/wiki/Aragen:_NWN
Please note that one of the two domains has to be Knowledge.
Additionally, you will have to come up with three statements regarding the chosen faith (source: https://wiki.layonara.com/wiki/Cleric_Paladin_and_Champion_Submissions
Due to the responsibility of a character who is granted divine power to uphold these things submissions for Clerics, Paladins and Champions must contain the following three sections in addition to the standard submission:
- An acknowledgement that the player has read and understands the dogma and expectations of their chosen deity and intends to follow them.
- How this particular character sees and interprets their deity's dogma in the past, and how they will, in the future, reflect that interpretation. This does not mean that your character may not change how they interpret the dogma or how they embody that interpretation as they are influenced by world events and RP. Treat this section as more of a description of how your character currently plans to embody their interpretation of the dogma.
- A discussion/explanation with respect to how closely the character follows normal practices of the chosen deity, particularly in regards to the character's choice of weapon, armor, clothing and even colors worn.
While classes are very limiting and kind of meta, we will still require the statements as after all, he is a cleric of Aragen.
My main concern with this submission is what Jericho already achieved at such a young age. I know, there are many discussions on various forums and channels as to how they age and what reaching adulthood means to elves, so I am skipping on that. As of writing this reply, the current year on Layonara is 1476. Real came to power around 1402-1404, which left him at 48 years by the time it happened. By that time he already rose up to a gang leader and later eventually owning an own newspaper. Keep in mind that Jericho is starting as a level 1 character. Right now it feels a bit overpowering, considering his level at the time of the submission.
Instead, you could focus a little more on the wizard aspects of this submission. I assume he was introduced in the theory of the Al'Noth by Anton Brightshadow?
The correct race of Lord Rael is Deep Dwarf
Additionally, involving another players' character in a submission will require the written consent of the player. Please have the player post in this thread.
It is a good submission and I can see the concept working, especially the journalist part, but it will require some minor tweaks