The World of Layonara
The Layonara Community => Poetic License => Topic started by: Zizz Zelan on June 02, 2004, 01:02:00 AM
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Just a little something I knocked off while thinking about Layonara. It's hastily written and unrevised, but then, what do I write that isn't? Comments are welcome.
"Ballad of the Unnamed Hero"
Sing, spirits, sing and hear my story,
Hear it on this mourning misty morn!
Hear my tale of strife and glory,
Of one now dead, and one never-born!
A hero was he, with eyes of fire,
Strong of arm, with lightning steel.
He rose to fight at Toran’s ire,
A fight not his his fate did seal.
Four days it’s been forth he went,
Four days of trials and travails fierce,
Four days before my sad lament,
Four days before his heart lay pierced!
Forth he went, four days before,
To mete the great god’s wrath.
Armor bright, and shield before:
Faith and Iron to guard his path!
He fell in val’rous battle with
A foe that never drew breath,
Fell and died on sword-thrust fifth
Straining ‘gainst the grim undeath!
And when he fell five sword-strokes in,
The lich-lord cackled on the moor,
“Fear not, your new life shall begin,
Soldier now mine, paladin poor!”
The hero managed a bloody smile,
And spoke through broken teeth,
“If die I must, thou creature vile,
Thou diest too, upon this heath.
“I stood steadfastly through five thrusts
Before my quest was done.
You forget, in your blood-lust,
I stood long enough to see the sun.”
The lich, forewarned, turned to flee
As a shy and startled fawn,
But the fighter’s fight doomed him to see
The white-hot light of dawn!
In the light the lich changed shape
Flesh appeared and breath was drawn,
Cap and clothes and even cape
Appeared in the light of dawn.
The change was done, a man now stood
In the lich-lord’s place.
He cried and screamed and wished he could
Turn back time’s heady pace!
But the hero spoke to the new-wrought man
Words fit to end his strife:
”I was sent here by Toran,
To deal not death, but life.”
Spirits sing, and hear my story!
A hero lies this morning mourned!
In the earth, bereft of glory,
His new-dug grave, unadorned!
Heed me spirits, and heed me man,
For as along as I draw breath,
I shall sing his praises when I can:
He who delivered me from death!
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I like it.
Now do one in Middle English ;)
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That is pretty cool. :)
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EdTheKet - 6/2/2004 3:44 PM I like it.
Now do one in Middle English ;)
*groan* -- let's not talk about that.
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Very nice. That was fun to read and I really enjoyed the twist. Thanks for sharing.
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I dont normaly read these poems. But I really liked this, really brought out some emotions. Thanks
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i really liked the poem.
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I , wha ... it was. :o
Wow, that is simply astounding. *Stands and aplouds*
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*claps* Sing us another song! Tell us another tale! And paint us another picture, for all to adore!
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*claps* Very good I really enjoyed it.
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uhhh, wow, thanks, guys. I don't hang around the Layo area much anymore, but Ed told me people were singing my praises in regard to this poem and I just had to come back and see. :) It's been almost a year since I wrote it, I guess, but it's always nice to see people enjoying my stuff. Thanks to the renewed interest, I'll put something else together for y'all -- cause you asked so nicely. :) Again, I appreciate the compliments!
(Also, hi Ed. :) )
-Zizz
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Zizz Zelan - 6/22/2005 4:37 AM (Also, hi Ed. :) ) -Zizz
Hi. Got those new discs yet? :)
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I really enjoyed the poem, looking forward to read you next one. :)
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Soon...soon. And I need to think up a workable character. I'm going to rummage through my backstory bin and see what I come up with.
EdTheKet - 6/22/2005 12:43 PM Zizz Zelan - 6/22/2005 4:37 AM (Also, hi Ed. :) ) -Zizz
Hi. Got those new discs yet? :)
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great job i realy liked it
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Good Job!!!!
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Awesome.
I loved the twist.