The World of Layonara
The Layonara Community => General Discussion => Topic started by: Doc-Holiday on November 09, 2005, 06:43:00 PM
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Have you seen my brain, I think I've lost it on a train
It wasn't near my feet, or even near my seat
I must get help and get it quick, I hope this isn't a mean spirited trick.
Oh I see a man, he has a funny tan
I've lost my brain upon a train, won't you help me Mr. Man with the funny tan?
*Honk Honk* What's that kid? *Honk Honk* What's that kid?
My brain! my BRAIN! I've lost it on a train, can't you help me find my brain?
Your brain? Ho ho! kid I'm a clown! you can't trust your brain to a clown
It's not a clown I lost it too! But a train of.. one.. or .. two?
Brain, and train? Kid I don't know why.. but you must try this pie!
A pie you say? how can it help? I suppose If I must I will try.
Now kid be quick and press it to your face, it always makes it taste like grace.
I pressed the pie to my face and screamed in horror in that place.
First I screamed and then I yelled, My brain is lost! and now this pie I tast has turned my face to paste!
I ran in circles to find help and all the while I did yelp
I found a man who had a bird, it would normaly seem absurd to find a man with such a bird
Oh sir oh help! my brain is lost my face is paste!
*squak* help! help! *squak* Help! help!
No! help me and not the bird! oh this is so absurd
My boy ignore the bird and do not hurd, your face is a simple case
It's not a parrot or a fince, I think this will be a simple cinch!
Now take these seed and the birds you feed will make your problems freed!
I took the seed and held the promise I would be freed!
Oh no! I gasped OH NO! I yelled! The pecking MUST be quelled!
First I shouted and then I jumped, the birds hung on as I pumped
When they fled my arm was shred! It was upon my arm they fed
They had gobbled to the shoulder! my luck couldn't be much colder
For help I ran and found a man!
Oh mister help! oh mister please! Oh mister with those weak old knees!
Eh? what is it? What do you want? Or do you come at me to taunt!
Oh no sir please, with those weak old knees, I must get help
My brain is lost, my face is past, my arm is gobled to the shoulder
Eh? What? Oh... so it is..
At this is pull out a stick so stout, you would think it stuffed with trout
You Laugh at my knees! I'll beat you all I please!
I screamed and I cried, I wished that I had died
When I finaly woke, I found myself completly broke
A man who saw me came over calmly
My boy! my boy! are you dead? all I see is all this red
I sniffled and I cried, no sir I hadn't died
Oh good he said, oh great he cried
I'm a Doctor and I've been tried!
Your organs I will take I've a bill I must break
I just need these little three, your liver, kidneys, and a spleen
he laughed and left me extra lean
As I lay I reach to my pocket, there I found not a locket
In that place my heart did race, I found my favorite missing part
my brain wasn't lost in space, but in my pocket next to a shoe and lace
Oh the story I should tell, that is if I should get well
I must get up and I tried
I turned and laughed.. and then I died
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That was the most disturbing thing I've ever read. A combination of "Ligeia" By Edgar Allen Poe and "Oh, the Places You'll Go" By Dr. Seuss.... seriously, I'm gonna have nightmares....
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probably one of the worst rhymings I've done.. but it was fun when it was still in my head
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*reads it and scratches his head, checks to make sure his brain is safely in his head, then wanders off utterly confused*
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Doc? Did you write that? And if so, put it in the Poetic Liscense thread, and send it to a journal for publishing at that... if you haven't already...
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Yes I wrote this... I thought it up on my hour drive home from work... weird things pop in my head on my way home from work
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so, in all seriousness, find your local poetry junkies/writers (usually found near colleges and universities), have them do some critiques, see if you like the crtitques, then look up a few journals and what their genre and publishing requirements are and submit it. I'm not a poetry expert, but I've done my time with it and with creative writing in general, and that up there *points* is good stuff.
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If I get the time... I'm still in College so I guess It won't be nearly as hard.
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still in college, eh? what do you study?
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Architectural Design
I'm finishing this Christmas
Doing an internship
I'm only 23
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Architectural design? gah! no wonder you're still in college... that's just plain work... and yeah, you mentioned your year of birth in another topic. happens to be the same as mine.
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You 2 are 23 huh. Well I've been RPing longer than you've been alive hahahaha.
As, my kids say I'm older than dirt :)
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I'm 16 and I go to college!
Also, I think I would be afraid if your own the road, with a piece of paper on the wheel, scribbing down random words like "I must include pie" and not looking at the road...oh dear...
Good rhyming though, I love random things, they are just great and show ya got smarts there Doccy!
:)
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hehehe... I didn't write it down.. I just remembered the funniest parts... though it rhymed more in my head
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*splut*
Just splutting this to the top for my own personal satisfaction
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I'm sixteen, and I USED to go to college...
Then my girlfriend broke up with me. xD
Grand poem there, Doc.