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The Layonara Community => Poetic License => Topic started by: miltonyorkcastle on March 07, 2006, 08:57:24 PM

Title: Dinosaur on the Floor
Post by: miltonyorkcastle on March 07, 2006, 08:57:24 PM

This work has not been completely edited and critiqued, but it's close enough for government work.   :p

Give it a few reads before you settle on an opinion of it.  It's one of my shorter narratives, and one of the few stories I've written that is strongly filtered through "realism."

Title: Re: Dinosaur on the Floor
Post by: SuperMunch on March 09, 2006, 11:57:56 AM

I read it and that's strong stuff you have there.

I don't know, if I was to give it a thumbs up or down, I'd have to give it a chartruce.

Title: Re: Dinosaur on the Floor
Post by: Stephen_Zuckerman on April 10, 2006, 02:50:25 PM

Interesting...

If I could make any suggestions, flesh it out a bit, or trim it a little.

Either way, though, it's still an interesting read.