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Mark Neverwinter

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    Letters to S.S. (someone special) #1-9
    « on: June 14, 2005, 07:37:00 am »
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                     To S.S. (#1)
                  These lonley nights
                I lay awake dreamless...
              Simply wishing you to be near...
          I long to hold you and never let you go...
     The few dreams that come in my brief moments of sleep
                Are of us together...
          Forever, 'till we're old and gray...
      And still love eachother just like on that first day...

                      To S.S. (#2)
            Your name is like candy on my lips....
          Your voice, like a breath of fresh air....
       Seeing you is like getting a glimpse of heaven....
    I dreamed of your lips meeting mine, it made my heart race....
    Seeing you makes so many feelings surface, yet all of them i must hide...

                      To S.S. (#3)
          In my sleep I toss, I turn, and wish you where mine....
    To love, to hold, and adore, to know that you would forever be at my side....
        Knowing that to be true would be the greatest thing of all....

                       To S.S. (#4)
       I don't want to wake up, i might lose control!!!
             For in my dreams, there is no pain....
         Because when im awake, my heart always aches...
         It's at the point im certant it will break!!!
    So quickley come here, you're the only one that can help me with this pain!!!
                  So set me free.........

                        To S.S. (#5)
    You ask me if I love you, well that all depends on your definition of love...
    If it's that if you see a future of both of us together in their eyes,
                        Then yes, I love you
        If it's Knowing that you never want to leave their side
                        Then yes I love you
                 If it's just some passing feeling
             Then no, because this feeling is here to stay...

                        To S.S. (#6)
         So perfect you are and will always be to me...
        I know not of our future only the here and now...
             I only know of my tear stained eyes,
       And the river of tears that is flowing down my face,
       And the stream runs off my face and hits my pillow,
                    As manny times before...
      This is what happens when i think of the beuty you hold,
                    You are what I adore!

                        To S.S. (#7)
    Sleep light, sleep tight, dream a pretty dream as you rest,
           May every dream you have be of the very best!
    Know I will be here for you forever, so there is no reason to fear,
    For I am here holding you in my arms, forever and always so close my dear...

                       To S.S. (#8)
                   You are a tourment
                That I wish not to escape!!!

                    You haunt My Dreams
           You hold each thought of mine captive!!!

       My heart cries out whenever I gaze into your eyes!
          Upon seeing you all things negative die!!!

                    You are the masterpiece
                Painted on a canvas called earth!
       Your beuty must have been planned before your birth!!!

             You are the true meaning of perfection!!!
               You are the object of my afection!!!

                         To S.S. (#9)
          You are the silent tormenter of my soul!
                  I see you everywhere!
           I don't even need to close my eyes!
          When i try to think i only think of you!
               You have invaded my mind!
         You are the reason i now fear sleep!
         For it is sleep that takes you away!
    Yes I dream of you, but that matters not, because it's not the same!
    In my dreams you are no longer perfect as you are here in the consious world!
           For my mind cannot comprehend you!
               You have driven me mad!
          The way you draw near when you speak!
        I feel your breath, and smell your potent perfume!
    I stray into the depths of your eyes and I find myself gasping For air!
        You sit and talk with me not knowing what you are doing!
          For I cannot tell you of these emotins!
         So whenever I see you I say these words under my breath
              'I love you, I love you, ------- dear!'
              My mind continues to stray into darkness!
    The only way and only day I'll be saved is the day you become my wife!


                          (all signed)          A True Love,
                                                        ~Mark~
     

    Eloyn

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    RE: Letters to S.S. (someone special) #1-9
    « Reply #1 on: June 14, 2005, 07:13:00 pm »
    Someone's got a crush :)
      Very nice though.
     

    miltonyorkcastle

    RE: Letters to S.S. (someone special) #1-9
    « Reply #2 on: June 14, 2005, 08:12:00 pm »
    not bad.  if you like writing love poems, try using one of the sonnet forms (modern or shakespearian), or a sestina.  i think you'll find adding form to your expression will help you enhance the meaning.  i'm not a poet myself, although i try my hand at some every now and then to keep in mind just how difficult they are.  i do, however, write narrative, or attempt to, and would encourage you to continue writing poetry, and, if possible, if don't already, get to know other, preferably, published poets.  a good way to meet them, surprisingly, is at your local college, particularly if they have any graduate english studies.
     

    Mark Neverwinter

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      RE: Letters to S.S. (someone special) #1-9
      « Reply #3 on: June 15, 2005, 04:51:00 am »
      I'll look into that  :)
       

       

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